Monday, August 17, 2009

New "hook" paragraph

This exercise is helping me refine my plot. It's hard work narrowing down the plot to just two paragraphs. Try this on for size...

If Kate can qualify for the State Junior Golf Championship, the resulting publicity could mean the difference between success and bankruptcy for Willow Bend Country Club, the small course her family owns. The announcement that Willow Bend will host the qualifying tournament for the States gives Kate the home course advantage that her confidence needs. But even at home, being the only girl in the field means enduring the taunts and stares of brainless boys. Even the ones who are your friends can be idiots sometimes.

When a grudge held by a rival player threatens to have the Qualifier moved to a different golf course and the boy she loves is accused of a crime, it is up to Kate to discover the real vandal before more damage is done. Can she beat him at his own game and still play her best to get to the States? Or will he drive a wedge (or putter) through the heart of first love?

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